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Tuesday, February 18, 2025

Mastering Dialogue: A Fiction Writer’s Guide

 

Remember, practice is key. The more you write, the better you'll become. Don't be afraid to experiment with different styles and genres. Most importantly, enjoy the process of creating stories that captivate your reader.


Mastering Dialogue: Crafting Authentic Dialogue in Fiction


By Olivia Salter 



A Fiction Writer’s Guide




👉 This guide is from one of my workshops. You can use it for yourself or in a workshop setting. 

Dialogue is one of the most powerful tools in fiction writing. It shapes characters, builds tension, reveals subtext, and propels the plot forward. Great dialogue isn’t just about what’s said—it’s about how it’s said, what’s left unsaid, and the rhythm of conversation. When executed well, dialogue can seamlessly blend with narrative to reveal deeper layers of meaning, guiding both character development and plot progression.

At its core, dialogue is the heartbeat of character interactions. It brings personalities to life and shows the intricacies of relationships. Characters’ unique voices, their underlying motivations, and even their silences all play pivotal roles in shaping the reader's understanding. Whether it's the quick exchanges that signal rising tension, the introspective pauses that hint at inner conflict, or the casual conversations that mask deeper emotional stakes, dialogue is the vehicle for dynamic storytelling.

However, dialogue must do more than simply mimic the rhythms of everyday speech. Fictional dialogue should be purposeful, engaging, and rich with meaning. It's about crafting words that not only sound authentic but also serve the larger narrative. Writers must learn to balance what’s said directly with the implications of what’s left unsaid. This balance is key in creating dialogue that rings true to life yet remains engaging and impactful on the page.

This guide accompanies the Dialogue Writing Workshop, providing practical tips, examples, and exercises designed to help you refine your skills and write compelling, character-driven dialogue. Through this workshop, you will learn to infuse your characters' words with emotional depth, master the art of subtext, and discover how to make each conversation count. By the end, you’ll have the tools to write dialogue that feels both authentic and dynamic, driving your story forward and leaving a lasting impact on your readers.

1. The Foundations of Fictional Dialogue

What makes dialogue sound natural yet purposeful?

Key Principles of Strong Dialogue

  • Purposeful: Every line of dialogue should serve a clear function within the narrative. Whether it reveals character traits, advances the plot, or creates tension, dialogue must never feel like filler. A conversation can reveal underlying motives, deepen relationships, or create conflict—all of which help to propel the story forward. When writing dialogue, always ask, "How does this conversation serve the character or plot?"

  • Natural but Polished: While dialogue should feel authentic, it shouldn't mimic every detail of real speech. In real life, conversations often meander, with excessive pauses, ums, and interruptions. However, in fiction, these details can slow down the pacing or lose reader engagement. Striking the balance between realism and readability is essential. Dialogue should flow smoothly, capturing the essence of real speech but without unnecessary fillers that distract from the story.

  • Distinct Voices: Each character should have a unique voice, influenced by their personality, background, and current emotional state. This allows readers to immediately distinguish between characters, even without dialogue tags. For instance, a character raised in a formal environment might speak with more restraint, while another might use slang or informal phrasing, revealing their background and personality through their speech. Ensuring each character's voice is distinct makes the dialogue feel more authentic and immersive.

Common Dialogue Mistakes to Avoid

Over-explaining: When characters state information that's already known or obvious, it can feel unnatural and patronizing. For example:

  • “As you know, I’m your brother and I’ve always been there for you.”

Better: Instead of over-explaining, allow the character’s actions or tone to convey their history. For example:

  • “I’ve always had your back. Don’t forget that.”

Too Much Small Talk: Many writers fall into the trap of including mundane exchanges that don't move the plot forward. For example:

  • “Hey, how are you?”
  • “I’m good, how about you?”
  • “Fine, thanks.”

Better: Skip the small talk, and jump into a more purposeful conversation, perhaps starting with a conflict or a revelation. For instance:

  • “You didn’t mention the wedding until two days ago. Why?”

By cutting out unnecessary exchanges and focusing on conversations that reveal something important, you keep the reader engaged and maintain narrative momentum.

Exercise: Write a conversation where one character is hiding a secret. The reader should sense something is off without being told directly.

This exercise will challenge you to convey hidden emotions or secrets through subtle cues in dialogue—things like tone, hesitation, word choice, and body language. The goal is to craft a conversation that feels realistic but layered with unspoken tension, letting readers pick up on what's unsaid.

2. Subtext & What’s Left Unsaid

Mastering what characters mean vs. what they say.

How to Use Subtext in Dialogue

  • Imply, Don’t State: One of the most effective ways to convey subtext is to avoid direct statements. When a character is angry, sad, or hurt, they don't always need to announce it. Instead, focus on their tone, choice of words, and delivery. For instance, instead of saying, “I’m furious with you,” show their anger through clipped sentences, sarcasm, or avoidance. The subtext lies in how they say something, rather than what they say.

  • Use Strategic Pauses: Silence and pauses can carry just as much weight as dialogue. A well-placed pause in a heated conversation can speak volumes, allowing the tension to build and giving the reader time to read between the lines. Pauses also create space for the reader to interpret the emotional undercurrent of the conversation. Characters who avoid direct answers or leave sentences unfinished often suggest something unsaid or unresolved, heightening the dramatic impact.

  • Create Misdirection: Subtext can also be used for misdirection, where a character talks about one subject, but their real feelings or motivations lie elsewhere. A character might deflect or change the subject in order to avoid confronting an uncomfortable truth. The key here is subtlety—this misdirection will engage readers and encourage them to pick up on the true meaning behind the words.

Example of Subtext in Conflict:

Too Direct:
Ava: “I’m mad because you forgot my birthday.”
Ben: “I’m sorry. I’ll make it up to you.”

With Subtext:
Ava: “I see you had time to go out last night.”
Ben: “What does that have to do with anything?”
Ava: “Nothing. Forget it.”

In the second example, the anger is clear without being directly stated. Ava’s words imply she feels neglected or unimportant, while Ben’s defensive response suggests guilt or avoidance. The real issue—the forgotten birthday—is only hinted at through Ava’s pointed remark, and Ben’s attempt to change the subject creates further tension. This exchange allows the reader to sense the conflict without it being explicitly spelled out.

Exercise:

Rewrite an argument where characters can’t directly state what they’re upset about. Use implication and tone instead.

In this exercise, focus on creating dialogue where the characters’ emotions are conveyed through indirect means. Instead of saying exactly what they’re angry, sad, or disappointed about, let the subtext emerge through their tone, word choice, or refusal to acknowledge the real issue. This approach will help you practice building deeper layers of meaning and tension in your dialogue.

3. Distinct Voices & Characterization Through Speech

Making every character sound unique without dialogue tags.

Elements of a Distinct Voice

  • Word Choice: The words a character uses tell us a lot about their personality, background, and emotional state. A character from a formal background might use more precise, polished language, while a more casual character might speak in a laid-back, colloquial way. Slang or specific jargon can also help define a character’s voice. For example, a character who uses technical terms or formal language could contrast sharply with one who speaks in more casual, everyday language, showcasing a difference in education, social class, or temperament. Additionally, word choice can reveal someone’s emotions or intentions. Someone in denial might use vague language, while someone who’s direct might speak plainly and without hesitation.

  • Sentence Length & Structure: How a character constructs their sentences can also differentiate their voice. A character who speaks in short, blunt sentences might come across as impatient or straightforward. On the other hand, a character who uses long, flowing sentences may sound more thoughtful or poetic. The rhythm of their speech also conveys mood or urgency—quick exchanges can indicate excitement or tension, while drawn-out dialogue can suggest calmness, contemplation, or indecision.

  • Speech Patterns & Tics: The little habits a character develops when speaking—like repeating certain words or phrases, stuttering, or using filler words (like "um" or "you know")—can add layers to their personality and help the reader identify them. A character who tends to ramble might come across as nervous, insecure, or just overly talkative. Conversely, a character who uses few words and pauses often could signal a reserved or mysterious nature. These speech patterns are subtle but can be a key part of making each character’s voice distinct without relying on tags like “he said” or “she said.”

Example – Two Characters Saying the Same Thing in Different Ways:

Bland Dialogue:
Bob: “I don’t like the way you did that.”
Marcus: “I don’t either.”

With Distinct Voices:
Bob (stern, authoritative): “That’s not how we do things here.”
Marcus (casual, sarcastic): “Yeah, ‘cause your way is working so well.”

In the second example, both characters express dissatisfaction, but their voices are distinct. Bob’s response is direct and commanding, while Marcus’s response is sarcastic and dismissive. These differences reveal much about their personalities—Bob is likely someone in charge or with high standards, while Marcus is more rebellious or indifferent. The way they speak—Bob with his assertiveness and Marcus with his irreverence—makes it clear who is speaking without needing to rely on a dialogue tag.

Exercise:

Write a dialogue exchange where the reader can infer who is speaking without any dialogue tags.

This exercise will help you focus on crafting unique, recognizable voices for your characters. Pay close attention to how the choice of words, sentence structure, and speech patterns work together to make each character stand out. The goal is to allow the reader to understand who is speaking purely from the dialogue itself, without any overt identifiers.

4. Pacing & Tension in Dialogue

How to speed up or slow down a scene with dialogue.

Techniques for Controlling Pacing

  • Short Sentences & Interruptions: To increase tension or urgency, use short, sharp sentences. This can simulate the rapid-fire exchanges common in heated arguments, action scenes, or moments of high stress. When characters interrupt one another or speak over each other, the flow becomes faster, mirroring the heightened emotions of the situation. This technique helps create a sense of chaos or impatience in the dialogue, forcing readers to feel the rush.

  • Longer Dialogue & Pauses: To slow down the pacing, use longer, more contemplative sentences, and give space for pauses. These moments of silence or slow exchanges can build suspense or allow readers to focus on the emotional complexity of a scene. Pauses are particularly effective when characters are processing something deeply, unsure, or working through difficult emotions. The rhythm of the conversation will signal to readers that something significant is about to unfold or is weighing heavily on the characters.

  • Avoiding Over-Explaining: Instead of characters explaining everything explicitly, let their dialogue suggest things through implication. This slows down the pace naturally, as readers must work to understand the emotional landscape and underlying tensions, making the exchange feel more nuanced. Over-explaining can feel artificial and remove the tension, whereas leaving things unsaid keeps the atmosphere charged and engaging.

Example – Tightening Dialogue for Tension

Slow, Overwritten Scene: Maya: “Why did you do that? I told you not to. Now everything is ruined.”
Jake: “I don’t know, I thought I was helping. I didn’t realize it would turn out this way.”

This example is slow and overly explanatory. Jake's long sentences feel like a justification, slowing down the scene and removing the sense of urgency or emotional tension.

With Tension & Urgency: Maya: “I told you not to.”
Jake: “I thought—”
Maya: “You didn’t.”

By tightening the dialogue, the exchange is more abrupt and filled with emotional urgency. Maya’s short, clipped sentences heighten the tension, and Jake’s interruption emphasizes his guilt or confusion. The reader can feel the quick rise in tension, which helps push the scene forward more powerfully.

Exercise:

Take a slow-moving scene and rewrite it using snappier, tighter dialogue to create urgency.

This exercise will help you practice tightening the pacing in your writing. Focus on cutting unnecessary explanations, shortening the sentences, and utilizing interruptions or pauses strategically. Consider what the scene's emotional stakes are and how you can enhance the sense of urgency or tension through the rhythm of dialogue.

5. Editing & Polishing Dialogue

Trimming the fat while keeping emotional impact.

How to Strengthen Dialogue in Revision

  • Cut Unnecessary Words: Dialogue can often become bloated with filler words such as “well,” “you know,” or excessive greetings. These words can break the flow of the conversation and make it feel less authentic. By cutting them out, the dialogue becomes more direct and powerful, allowing the character's true emotions and intentions to shine through without the distractions.

  • Show, Don’t Tell: Instead of having a character explicitly say, “I’m scared,” use their actions or the way they speak to convey that emotion. Hesitation, broken sentences, or avoidance in their speech can indicate fear or uncertainty without directly stating it. This technique enhances emotional depth and engages the reader more effectively.

  • Replace Exposition with Implication: When characters explain backstory or details in dialogue, it can come off as clunky and unnatural. Instead of having a character explain a past event directly, incorporate that backstory through what they do or how they react to a present situation. Let readers infer the context through implication rather than exposition, creating a more engaging and subtle narrative.

Before & After Editing Example:

Overwritten Dialogue:
Lisa: “I can’t believe you didn’t tell me about the job offer earlier. I was completely shocked when I found out. You should have said something.”
Mike: “I was waiting for the right time. It’s complicated, and I wasn’t sure how you’d feel.”

In this version, there’s too much repetition and unnecessary explanation. Lisa’s outrage and Mike’s reasoning are clear, but the dialogue feels a bit too explanatory.

Tighter, More Impactful:
Lisa: “You knew, and you didn’t tell me?”
Mike: “I was waiting.”

Here, the dialogue is sharper and more to the point. Lisa's reaction is just as intense, but the emotional weight is conveyed through the brevity of her words. Mike's response is more enigmatic, creating space for tension and ambiguity. This trimmed version is much more impactful, making the moment feel urgent and emotionally charged.

Exercise:

Trim a passage of dialogue by 30% while keeping its emotional impact intact.

This exercise will help you refine the art of brevity in dialogue, ensuring that every word serves a purpose. When trimming, focus on maintaining the emotional core of the exchange while eliminating any superfluous details or redundant phrasing. The goal is to make each line count and keep the dialogue tight, leaving no room for filler.

Final Challenge: Writing a Scene with Pure Dialogue

Convey setting, emotion, and conflict without action beats or description.

Rules for the Challenge:

  • No dialogue tags (he said, she asked).
  • No action beats or setting descriptions.
  • The conversation should hint at location, mood, and conflict.

This challenge encourages you to focus solely on dialogue to communicate everything about the scene—emotion, tension, and even the setting—without relying on traditional narrative techniques like dialogue tags or action beats. This pushes you to think carefully about how dialogue can create atmosphere and convey deeper meanings indirectly.

Example:

"You sure this is the place?"
"Yeah. The lights are on."
"That doesn’t mean she’s home."
"You’re nervous."
"I’m careful. Big difference."

In this example, the absence of any description allows the reader to infer several things: there’s uncertainty about a location (suggested by the question), a sense of tension (hinted at through the exchange about being “nervous”), and possibly a deeper conflict (suggested by the differences between the characters). While we don’t know where they are or what the immediate situation is, the dialogue provides enough clues to build a scene.

Exercise:

Write a short scene (10–15 lines) using only dialogue, where readers can infer the setting, emotions, and conflict.

As you work through the exercise, think about the following:

  • Tone: Does the tone of the conversation suggest the environment? Are the characters tense, relaxed, hurried, or contemplative?
  • Unsaid Information: What’s left unsaid? The emotional subtext, like a hidden argument or a deep-seated fear, can be conveyed through what’s implied in the dialogue.
  • Pacing: How can the rhythm of the conversation reflect urgency, calmness, or building tension?

This challenge will help you develop your ability to write focused, impactful dialogue that reveals much more than it explicitly states.

Conclusion: Becoming a Master of Dialogue

By applying the techniques in this guide, you’ll strengthen your ability to craft compelling, purposeful dialogue that enhances character, deepens subtext, and drives your story forward.

Final Tips for Dialogue Mastery:

Read your dialogue aloud – Does it sound natural? Does it flow?
Reading your dialogue out loud is one of the most effective ways to ensure it feels realistic and engaging. This technique helps you hear awkward phrasing, unnatural speech patterns, or a lack of rhythm that can break immersion. Characters should sound like real people, so if they don’t sound like someone you’d meet in real life, it’s worth revisiting.

Cut anything unnecessary – Keep it sharp and engaging.
Great dialogue isn’t cluttered with unnecessary fillers or redundant information. Every line should serve a purpose, whether it’s revealing character, advancing the plot, or building tension. If a line doesn’t do this, consider trimming it or reworking it.

Study great dialogue in books & films – Analyze how tension, voice, and subtext are handled.
Immersing yourself in high-quality dialogue from literature and films is invaluable. Pay attention to how different writers and directors use dialogue to establish mood, convey conflict, or reveal character traits. The best dialogue often isn’t about what’s said but what’s implied. Observe how characters reveal emotions and backstory without explicitly saying it.

Keep practicing – The more you write, the stronger your dialogue will become.
Dialogue writing, like any skill, improves with practice. Challenge yourself to write dialogue-heavy scenes or conversations where you try to reveal as much as possible without relying on description or action. The more you experiment and refine, the more natural and powerful your dialogue will become.

Great dialogue isn’t just about words—it’s about what’s felt between the lines. Every conversation should carry emotional weight, whether it’s tension, humor, or conflict. Keep writing, keep experimenting, and let your characters speak in voices that leave a lasting impact. Through consistent practice, you’ll develop a deep understanding of how to make your characters come to life through their words, transforming simple exchanges into meaningful moments within your story.

Mastering Dialogue: Crafting Authentic Dialogue in Fiction


Remember, practice is key. The more you write, the better you'll become. Don't be afraid to experiment with different styles and genres. Most importantly, enjoy the process of creating stories that captivate your reader.


Mastering Dialogue: Crafting Authentic Dialogue in Fiction


By Olivia Salter


Dialogue Writing  Workshop




👉 This guide is from one of my workshops. You can use it for yourself or in a workshop setting. 


Dialogue is more than just characters speaking—it's a powerful tool that reveals personality, deepens relationships, and drives the story forward. In this workshop, we will explore how to craft dialogue that breathes life into characters, advances the plot, and reveals deeper layers of subtext. Participants will learn how to balance authenticity, rhythm, and emotional depth while avoiding common pitfalls such as info-dumping, unnatural speech patterns, and dialogue that lacks purpose.

Through a combination of targeted exercises, discussion, and analysis of compelling examples from literature and film, participants will refine their ability to write conversations that feel real, resonate with readers, and shape unforgettable characters. This workshop will also emphasize the importance of what is left unsaid—the power of subtext, body language, and silence in dialogue.

By the end of the session, participants will have a deeper understanding of how to craft distinct character voices, create tension through verbal exchanges, and use dialogue to immerse readers in the emotional landscape of their stories. Whether writing contemporary fiction, historical dramas, thrillers, or fantasy epics, participants will leave with the skills to craft conversations that not only sound real but also elevate their storytelling to new heights.

 Workshop Structure:

1. The Foundations of Fictional Dialogue

  • Dialogue is one of the most immersive tools in storytelling, allowing readers to engage with characters in an immediate and personal way. However, writing compelling dialogue requires a balance between natural speech patterns and narrative purpose. In this section, we will explore:

    • What makes dialogue sound natural yet purposeful?
      Real-life conversations are often messy, filled with interruptions, hesitations, and tangents. In fiction, however, dialogue should serve a purpose—revealing character, advancing the plot, or building tension—without sacrificing authenticity. We will analyze examples of well-crafted dialogue to understand how writers make it feel organic while still driving the story forward.

    • The balance between realism and readability
      Too much realism—such as excessive filler words (“um,” “like,” “well”)—can slow the narrative, while overly polished dialogue can feel unnatural. We will discuss how to create speech patterns that feel true to life without overwhelming the reader with unnecessary clutter.

    • Dialogue as character development
      How a character speaks—word choice, sentence structure, rhythm—can reveal their background, personality, and emotions. A nervous character may use short, fragmented sentences, while a confident character might speak in longer, fluid statements. We will explore how to craft distinct voices for different characters, ensuring they don’t all sound the same.

    Exercise:

    Write a conversation between two characters where one is hiding a secret. The goal is to make the reader sense something is off without explicitly stating the secret. Focus on subtle cues such as word choice, pauses, evasive responses, or abrupt changes in subject. This exercise will help participants practice layering meaning beneath the surface of dialogue.

    This section will provide the foundational skills necessary to craft dialogue that is both believable and compelling, setting the stage for more advanced techniques in subtext, pacing, and emotional depth.

2. Subtext & What’s Left Unsaid

  • In real life, people rarely say exactly what they mean, especially in moments of tension, vulnerability, or conflict. Subtext—the meaning behind the words—adds depth to dialogue by allowing characters to communicate emotions, desires, and conflicts indirectly. This section will explore how to craft dialogue that engages readers on multiple levels by utilizing implication, tone, and what remains unsaid.

    Key Topics:

    • Writing between the lines
      Subtext emerges when characters say one thing but mean another, or when their words contrast with their true emotions. For example, a character might insist, "I'm fine," while their body language or clipped tone suggests the opposite. We will examine how to use contradictions, hidden motives, and coded language to create richer, more layered dialogue.

    • The power of pauses and silence
      Sometimes, what a character doesn’t say is just as important as what they do. Awkward silences, long pauses, or sudden subject changes can indicate discomfort, avoidance, or emotional weight. We will analyze how writers use strategic silence to build tension, shift power dynamics, and deepen a scene’s emotional impact.

    • How to show conflict through subtext
      Conflict in dialogue doesn’t always require shouting or dramatic confrontations. A passive-aggressive remark, a forced smile, or a subtle dig can be just as powerful as an outright argument. We will study how subtext can transform an ordinary conversation into a charged, compelling exchange.

    Exercise:

    Rewrite a scene where two characters are arguing—but they can’t directly state what they’re upset about. Instead of explicitly naming the issue, use implication, indirect statements, and changes in tone to reveal their underlying frustration. This exercise will help participants practice writing tension-filled dialogue that engages readers on a deeper level.

    By mastering subtext, writers can create more engaging, realistic dialogue that makes readers lean in, eager to uncover the emotions and truths hidden beneath the surface.

3. Distinct Voices & Characterization Through Speech

One of the hallmarks of masterful dialogue is the ability to distinguish characters by their speech patterns alone. Readers should be able to tell who is speaking, even without dialogue tags or description. This section will focus on developing unique, authentic character voices that reflect personality, background, and emotional state.

Key Topics:

  • How to make each character sound unique
    Every character should have their own way of speaking based on their personality, upbringing, education, and worldview. Consider how a sarcastic teenager, a reserved professor, and a fast-talking hustler would each phrase the same sentence differently. We will examine ways to create distinct voices using:

    • Word choice (formal vs. informal, slang vs. precise vocabulary)
    • Sentence structure (short and punchy vs. long and flowing)
    • Rhythm and pacing (quick-witted banter vs. slow, measured speech)
    • Repetitive quirks (catchphrases, verbal tics, or habitual phrases)
  • The role of background, personality, and motivation in dialogue
    Speech patterns are shaped by experience. A character raised in the South might have a different rhythm and vocabulary than someone from New York. A highly educated scientist might speak differently from a self-taught entrepreneur. Additionally, emotions and motivations affect how characters communicate. Someone trying to impress may use elaborate language, while someone in distress might speak in fragments. We will explore how to reflect a character’s inner world through their dialogue.

  • Avoiding dialogue that sounds too “written”
    One common pitfall in dialogue writing is making characters sound unnatural—either too polished or overly expository. In real conversations, people interrupt, trail off, and don’t always speak in complete sentences. We will discuss how to:

    • Remove “on-the-nose” dialogue where characters state exactly what they feel
    • Use contractions and informal phrasing to make speech more natural
    • Balance realism with clarity to ensure dialogue remains engaging

Exercise:

Write a dialogue exchange between two or more characters where the reader can infer who is speaking without any dialogue tags or description. Focus on making each voice distinct through word choice, sentence structure, and rhythm.

This exercise will help participants develop a sharper ear for character voice, ensuring their dialogue feels authentic and engaging while making characters more memorable and unique.

4. Pacing & Tension in Dialogue

  • Dialogue isn’t just about what characters say—it’s also about how they say it and how quickly (or slowly) information is revealed. The rhythm of an exchange can build tension, create urgency, or slow the narrative down for introspection. This section will focus on how to manipulate pacing in dialogue to enhance emotional impact and drive the plot forward.

    Key Topics:

    • Short vs. long exchanges: When to speed up or slow down
      The length of dialogue exchanges affects the reader’s perception of time.

      • Short, rapid-fire dialogue speeds up a scene, increasing urgency, excitement, or conflict. It works well in arguments, action scenes, and moments of heightened tension.
      • Longer, meandering exchanges slow the pacing, allowing room for reflection, emotional depth, or subtle character development. These are useful for building suspense before a revelation or creating intimacy between characters.
        Writers must learn to control pacing to match the mood of the scene and avoid unnecessary drag.
    • Interruptions, overlaps, and realistic rhythm
      In real conversations, people interrupt, talk over one another, and cut each other off, especially in heated moments. Writing these elements effectively can create a sense of realism and urgency.

      • Use dashes ("—") to show interruptions.
      • Let characters trail off with ellipses ("…") to suggest hesitation or an unfinished thought.
      • Overlapping dialogue can indicate tension, confusion, or excitement.

      We will analyze examples of dialogue where interruptions and pauses enhance realism and tension.

    • How dialogue drives plot forward
      Well-crafted dialogue isn’t just filler—it should serve a purpose, whether that’s revealing information, escalating conflict, or changing the course of the story. We will explore how to:

      • Use dialogue to create conflict (verbal sparring, misunderstandings, power struggles).
      • Reveal critical details without dumping exposition.
      • Show shifting dynamics between characters (who has control in the conversation, who’s backing down, who’s pushing forward).
      • Keep dialogue engaging by ensuring every line has a reason to exist.

    Exercise:

    Take a slow-moving scene—perhaps a mundane conversation or an exposition-heavy exchange—and rewrite it using snappier, tighter dialogue to create urgency. Focus on:

    • Cutting unnecessary words.
    • Using interruptions and short sentences to add tension.
    • Letting subtext and body language replace excessive explanation.

    This exercise will help participants refine their dialogue pacing, ensuring that every conversation feels dynamic, emotionally charged, and essential to the story.

5. Editing & Polishing Dialogue

  • Writing strong dialogue isn’t just about what’s included—it’s also about what’s left out. Effective dialogue is concise, engaging, and emotionally resonant. In this section, we’ll focus on refining dialogue through editing techniques that make every word count.

    Key Topics:

    • Cutting the fluff: What doesn’t need to be said
      In real life, people speak with a lot of filler—“um,” “like,” “well,” and unnecessary pleasantries. While this can add realism, too much can bog down a scene. Every line of dialogue should serve a purpose: revealing character, advancing the plot, or building tension. We will explore:

      • Identifying and removing redundant words.
      • Cutting small talk that doesn’t add value.
      • Condensing long-winded speech into sharper, more impactful lines.
    • Avoiding “on the nose” dialogue
      “On the nose” dialogue is when characters state exactly what they think or feel, making the conversation too obvious. In real life, people often speak in layers, hinting at emotions rather than outright declaring them. We’ll examine ways to:

      • Use subtext and body language to replace overly direct statements.
      • Show conflict through what isn’t said.
      • Create more natural, engaging dialogue that allows readers to infer meaning.
    • Making every word count
      The best dialogue is precise and purposeful. Each line should:

      • Reveal something about the character or situation.
      • Move the story forward.
      • Engage the reader with rhythm and flow.
        We’ll look at examples of dialogue before and after editing to see how small tweaks—such as tightening sentences, removing filler, and replacing clichés—can elevate the conversation.

    Exercise:

    Take a passage of dialogue and trim it by 30% while keeping its emotional impact intact. Focus on:

    • Removing unnecessary words and filler.
    • Strengthening subtext by cutting overly direct statements.
    • Preserving the rhythm and tone of the conversation.

    This exercise will help participants sharpen their editing skills, ensuring that their dialogue is lean, engaging, and emotionally powerful.

Final Challenge: The Power of Pure Dialogue

The ultimate test of strong dialogue is whether it can stand on its own—without narration, action beats, or description—while still conveying setting, emotions, and conflict. In this final challenge, participants will put everything they’ve learned into practice by crafting a short scene using only spoken words.

Objectives:

  • Create a vivid setting through speech alone.

    • How can dialogue hint at the location?
    • Can background noise, atmosphere, or physical space be implied through what the characters say?
    • Example: “Do you hear that? That damn train again. Every night at 2 AM, shaking the whole house.” → Implies a house near train tracks.
  • Reveal emotions without stating them outright.

    • Characters shouldn't say, "I'm angry" or "I'm scared," but their words and tone should make it clear.
    • Example: “Oh, so now you care? That’s rich.” → Sarcasm and resentment are evident without explicitly saying “I’m mad at you.”
  • Develop conflict naturally.

    • Every great scene has tension, whether subtle or overt.
    • Is there an argument brewing? Is someone lying? Is one person desperately trying to avoid saying something?

Guidelines for the Challenge:

  1. No action beats or descriptions (e.g., She sighed. He clenched his fists.)
  2. No dialogue tags (e.g., he said, she asked)—the voices must be distinct enough for readers to follow.
  3. Use speech patterns, word choice, and rhythm to differentiate characters.

Example (without action or tags):

"You’re late."

"I know. I—"

"Don’t. Just don’t."

"Come on, let me explain."

"Explain what? That I sat here for two hours, like an idiot? That I told everyone you’d be here? That I kept making excuses for you?"

"I got held up."

"Held up where? With who?"

"Does it matter?"

"Wow. You’re not even trying, are you?"

"I messed up, okay? But I’m here now."

"Yeah. When it doesn’t matter anymore."

—This short exchange suggests an emotional conflict (betrayal, disappointment) and hints at an implied setting (a place where someone was waiting).

Exercise Instructions:

Write a short scene (10–15 lines of dialogue) where:

  • The setting is evident without description.
  • The characters’ emotions are clear through their words alone.
  • There is conflict or tension that drives the conversation forward.

By mastering this challenge, participants will sharpen their ability to write dialogue that is immersive, emotionally charged, and engaging without relying on external narration.

Conclusion: Elevating Your Dialogue-Writing Skills

Throughout this workshop, participants have explored the art of writing compelling, dynamic dialogue—honing skills in authenticity, subtext, pacing, voice, and tension. By engaging in targeted exercises and the final challenge, they have developed a deeper understanding of how to craft conversations that feel real, resonate with readers, and drive their stories forward.

Key Takeaways:

  • Authenticity & Purpose: Dialogue should sound natural yet serve a clear function—whether it's revealing character, advancing the plot, or creating tension.
  • Subtext & Emotion: What’s left unsaid is just as powerful as what’s spoken. Layering meaning beneath dialogue adds depth and intrigue.
  • Distinct Voices: Every character should have a unique speech pattern that reflects their background, personality, and emotions.
  • Pacing & Tension: Well-crafted dialogue controls the rhythm of a scene, building suspense or slowing down for emotional impact.
  • Editing & Precision: Strong dialogue is concise, impactful, and free from unnecessary filler or exposition.

Next Steps:

Participants are encouraged to:

  1. Apply these techniques to their current works-in-progress.
  2. Analyze dialogue in published fiction—noting how authors use subtext, pacing, and characterization through speech.
  3. Continue practicing through exercises like rewriting dialogue-heavy scenes, experimenting with different voices, or crafting purely dialogue-driven narratives.
  4. Read dialogue aloud to check for authenticity, flow, and emotional impact.

By mastering dialogue, writers can create more engaging, immersive stories that draw readers into the world of their characters. Every conversation should feel alive—charged with emotion, personality, and purpose.

Final Thought: The best dialogue doesn’t just tell a story; it reveals it. Keep writing, keep refining, and let your characters speak in voices that readers will never forget.

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Wednesday, May 3, 2023

A Quick Note on Dialogue in Fiction Writing for the Novice Writer by Ryker J. Phoenix

A Quick Note on Dialogue in Fiction Writing for the Novice Writer by Ryker J. Phoenix

 

 A Quick Note on Dialogue in Fiction Writing for the Novice Writer

 

by Ryker J. Phoenix

 

Dialogue is one of the most essential elements of fiction writing. It holds the power to bring characters to life and helps readers feel connected to the narrative. It is through dialogue that the characters can express their thoughts, emotions and reactions to the situations they face in the story. This article will discuss the significance of dialogue in fiction writing and how it helps in the creation of a compelling story.

One of the primary functions of dialogue in fiction writing is to reveal the character's personalities, their relationships, and their motivations. The way a character speaks can tell a reader a great deal about them. For instance, if a character is prone to using slang or speaking in a vulgar manner, it can reveal their social status or background, their level of education or experience. Dialogue can also demonstrate a character's personality traits such as wit, humour, impatience, anxiety, etc. For instance, a character who makes humorous quips without thinking may be seen as irreverent, while another who pauses and reflects before speaking may be seen as introspective.

Furthermore, dialogue is critical in fiction writing because it brings a sense of realism to the story and helps readers feel connected to the characters. Dialogue can transport the reader into the story world and make them feel like they are part of the conversation. It can enhance the emotional impact of a scene by adding depth and resonance to the characters' emotions. Dialogue can allow readers to relate to characters, which is essential for creating compelling stories.

Dialogue in fiction is also essential for advancing the plot of a story. Characters speak for a reason, and it is through dialogue that actions take place. Dialogue can lead to revelations, conflicts, confrontations, and decisions, all of which move the story forward. Without dialogue, the story could feel stagnant, and the characters would never move beyond the opening scenes.

Finally, dialogue brings pacing and tension to a story. Good dialogue is snappy, terse, and full of tension. It keeps readers on the edge of their seats, wondering what will happen next. Dialogue can build suspense, evolve subplots within the main plot, and add richness to the story. It offers readers a break from long paragraphs of description and action and provides fresh voices, which invigorate a story’s plot.

In conclusion, dialogue is an essential aspect of creating good fiction writing. It reveals characters, advances the plot, and brings a sense of realism to the story. Dialogue is also a powerful way to engage readers, enhance emotional impact, and create tension. Writing good dialogue is a skill that writers can use to bring their characters to life and keep readers connected and engaged with the story.

 

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Sunday, January 8, 2023

Writing Subtext in Dialogue (Video)

Writing Subtext in Dialogue


“It’s not what you say; it’s what you don’t say.”

Subtext involves the hidden feelings beneath spoken words—anger, love, mistrust—all the emotions characters don’t dare admit aloud. It can add sizzle to drab dialogue and make the speakers sound like real people. If you’ve ever been told your conversation scenes feel “too on the nose,” this video is for you.


What Is Subtext? (0:00)
Body Language (1:05)
Secondary Emotion (3:51)
Sugarcoating (5:37)
Implied Accusation (7:51)
Passive Agressiveness (9:27)
Why We Use Subtext (11:55)
Writing Exercise (13:16)


Sunday, November 13, 2022

Dialogue Tags with Adverbs

Dialogue Tags with Adverbs

Inexperienced authors often add adverbs to their dialogue tags, such as, "He shouted angrily." But good writing doesn't need adverbs to make your readers understand how your characters are thinking or feeling. Your dialogue should be strong enough to convey that emotion by itself.

If your meaning isn't clear without an adverb, then you need to re-examine the content of your dialogue to make it more effective. Here's an example of using an adverb with a dialogue tag:

  • "I can't believe you forgot my birthday," Mary said angrily.

You should aim to keep your use of adverbs to under 12% of your dialogue tags.

Removing Adverbs From Your Dialogue Tags

If more than 12% of your dialogue tags have adverbs, it's time to remove some of those adverbs. To do so, take a hard look at your writing.

When possible, you should try to omit dialogue tags completely. Dialogue tags can distract your reader and interrupt the flow of your dialogue.

Ask yourself, "Does the reader need this dialogue tag to know who is speaking?" If they don't, you can get rid of the dialogue tag. You may cut down on your adverbs with dialogue tags by just removing dialogue tags in general. Let's rework our example:

  • Mary slammed her hand on the table. "I can't believe you forgot my birthday."

What about instances when you definitely want to keep the dialogue tag?

  • "It's okay, I'm on my way home now," she said soothingly.

In these cases, see if you can beef up the dialogue and lose the adverb:

  • "You just sit tight and pop the kettle on for me," she said. "I'll be home before you know it."

 

Common Questions about Dialogue Tags with Adverbs

 

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Saturday, November 12, 2022

Nonstandard Dialogue Tags

Nonstandard Dialogue Tags

Dialogue tags are words like "said" and "asked" that show the reader who is doing the talking. The problem is that dialogue tags also distract from the dialogue itself, especially if they are nonstandard dialogue tags like "shouted," "whispered," "repeated," "ventured," and more. Instead of using dialogue tags to tell the emotions of the character, you should show their emotions through their actions and dialogue.

Showing emotions makes your writing more engaging. Take a look at this chart we put together based on analysis of published fiction.

 


As you can see, published authors use "said" as their dialogue tag over 60% of the time. The second most used is "asked" at just under 10%. The other, nonstandard dialogue tags are used only used a small proportion of the time. Because of this data, we recommend keeping your use of dialogue tags other than "said" and "asked" to under 20% of your dialogue tags.

How Nonstandard Dialogue Tags Distract Your Reader

Good writing shows the reader how characters feel rather than telling the reader how the characters feel. When you "show" rather than "tell," you engage your reader more in your text because the reader gets to make inferences and use their imagination more.

Consider the following examples:

Example 1

"You left me alone at the party," Jessica spat at her boyfriend.

"You were mad at me," Mark said as he looked as his phone.

Jessica yelled, "This is over!"

Example 2

Jessica glared at her boyfriend as he played on his phone. "You left me alone at that party."

"You were mad at me," Mark said without looking up.

Jessica stormed towards the door. "This is over."

The second example lets the reader connect more with the characters. Instead of telling the reader exactly how the characters are feeling, the writer lets their actions do the talking. As a reader, you get a better sense of the characters as fully developed beings.

 

Common Questions about Nonstandard Dialogue Tags

 

Why should I stick to "said" and "asked" as my dialogue tags?

 

 

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Friday, November 11, 2022

Using Dialogue Tags

Using Dialogue Tags

Dialogue tags are words like "said" and "asked" that identify the speaker. They are necessary to help readers understand and follow conversations. But it's a delicate balance: if you overuse dialogue tags, you risk distracting your reader from your story.

A dialogue tag is like a street sign. You don't need to see a street sign every few feet along the road. You only need street signs when you approach new roads different from the one you’re on so you know where you're going.

You only need dialogue tags when you need to identify who's talking. If who's speaking is obvious to the reader, then skip the dialogue tags. We recommend using tags in less than 15% of your dialogue.

Why Overusing Dialogue Tags Is Bad

Dialogue tags can distract your reader. Your dialogue tags should be almost invisible. Here’s an example of overused dialogue tags:

"Where are you going?" asked Monica.
"I’m off to the store," said Chandler.
"Who’s all going with you?" asked Monica.
"Just Joey and Ross," said Chandler.

It's distracting to use dialogue tags with each sentence. Because there are only two people involved in the conversation, the last two sentences don’t need the tags. Having dialogue tags only serves to interrupt the flow of the dialogue and distract your reader.

Here's how you can change it:

"Where are you going?" asked Monica.
"I’m off to the store," said Chandler.
"Who’s all going with you?"
"Just Joey and Ross."

It’s obvious who’s talking in the third and fourth sentences without using dialogue tags.

Great dialogue shouldn't need more than a few dialogue tags. If more than 15% of your dialogue has dialogue tags, it's time to remove some!

Common Questions about Dialogue Tags

 

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Wednesday, October 19, 2022

"Let's Talk About Dialogue,'' He Pontificated by Crawford Kilian

"Let's Talk About Dialogue,'' He Pontificated 

by Crawford Kilian

 

Dialogue has to sound like speech, but it can't be a mere transcript; most people don't speak precisely or concisely enough to serve the writer's needs. Good dialogue has several functions:

  • To convey exposition: to tell us, through the conversations of the characters, what we need to know to make sense of the story.
  • To convey character: to show us what kinds of people we're dealing with.
  • To convey a sense of place and time: to evoke the speech patterns, vocabulary and rhythms of specific kinds of people.
  • To develop conflict: to show how some people use language to dominate others, or fail to do so.
Each of these functions has its hazards. Expository dialogue can be dreadful:

``We'll be in Vancouver in thirty minutes,'' the flight attendant said. ``It's Canada's biggest west coast city, with a population of over a million in the metropolitan area.''
Dialogue can convey character, but the writer may bog down in chatter that doesn't advance the story.

``When I was a kid,'' said Julie, ``I had a stuffed bear named Julius. He was a sweet old thing, and whenever I was upset I'd howl for him.'' (Unless Julie is going to howl for Julius when her husband leaves her, this kind of remark is pointless.)
Dialogue that conveys a specific place and time can become exaggerated and stereotyped:

``Pretty hot ootside, eh?'' remarked Sergeant Renfrew of the Royal Canadian Mounted Police. ``Good day to get oot of the hoose and oot on the saltchuck, eh? Catch us a couple of skookum salmon, eh?''
Dialogue that develops conflict has to do so while also conveying exposition, portraying character, and staying true to the time and place:

``Gadzooks,'' said Sergeant Renfrew as he dismounted from his motorcycle. ``Wouldst please present thy driver's licence and registration, madam?''

``Eat hot lead, copper!'' snarled Sister Mary Agnes as she drew the .45 from within her habit.

Some Dialogue Hazards to Avoid:

  • Too much faithfulness to speech: ``Um, uh, y'know, geez, well, like, well.''
  • Unusual spellings: ``Yeah,'' not ``Yeh'' or ``Yea'' or ``Ya.''
  • Too much use of ``he said,'' ``she said.''
  • Too much variation: ``he averred,'' ``she riposted''
  • Dialect exaggeration: ``Lawsy, Miz Scahlut, us's wuhkin' jes' as fas' as us kin.''
  • Excessive direct address: ``Tell me, Marshall, your opinion of Vanessa.'' ``I hate her, Roger.'' ``Why is that, Marshall?'' ``She bullies everyone, Roger.''

Some Dialogue Conventions to Consider:

Each new speaker requires a new paragraph, properly indented and set off by quotation marks.

``Use double quotations,'' the novelist ordered, ``and remember to place commas and periods inside those quotation marks.''

``If a speaker goes on for more than one paragraph,'' the count responded in his heavy Transylvanian accent, ``do not close off the quotation marks at the end of the first paragraph.

``Simply place quotation marks at the beginning of the next paragraph, and carry on to the end of the quotation.''

Use ``he said'' expressions only when you must, to avoid confusion about who's speaking. You can signal increasing tension by moving from ``he said'' to ``he snapped,'' to ``he snarled,'' to ``he bellowed furiously.'' But the dialogue itself should convey that changing mood, and make such comments needless.

Action as well as speech is a part of dialogue. We expect to know when the speakers pause, where they're looking, what they're doing with their hands, how they respond to one another. The characters' speech becomes just one aspect of their interactions; sometimes their words are all we need, but sometimes we definitely need more. This is especially true when you're trying to convey a conflict between what your characters say and what they feel: their nonverbal messages are going to be far more reliable than their spoken words.

Speak your dialogue out loud; if it doesn't sound natural, or contains unexpected rhymes and rhythms, revise it.

Rely on rhythm and vocabulary, not phonetic spelling, to convey accent or dialect.

If you are giving us your characters' exact unspoken thoughts, use italics. If you are paraphrasing those thoughts, use regular Roman type):

Now what does she want? he asked himself. Isn't she ever satisfied? Marshall wondered what she wanted now. She was never satisfied.
If you plan to give us a long passage of inner monologue, however, consider the discomfort of having to read line after line of italic print. If you wish to emphasize a word in a line of italics, use Roman: Isn't she ever satisfied?

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 About the Author 

Crawford Kilian
Crawford Kilian was born in New York City in 1941. He moved to Canada in 1967 and now resides in Vancouver B.C. Crawford has had twelve science fiction and fantasy novels published. He has been nominated for an Aurora Award 3 times for his novels Eyas, Lifter and Rogue Emperor- A Novel of the Chronoplane Wars. His latest contribution to SF is a non-fiction book for would-be SF writers called Writing Science Fiction and Fantasy. Crawford has two more novels in the works.

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